They must both work downtown, but downtown is big. So the suburban rail carries them both in, briefcases and all. They must see a bit of the country in between the dark tunnels, which is “quite something” now that the sun rises early. Once off the train at the Northern Junction they go their separate ways. A have-a-good-day kiss never seemed so week-daily real amidst the morning rush, dusty litter swirling in the breeze and the three (red, blue and green) plastic buckets where the dripping water off the humid station walls sets a rhythm nobody pays attention to.
In response to: https://carrotranch.com/2019/03/21/march-21-flash-fiction-challenge/
This is really well done. I enjoy exploring the things no one notices with my writing and my reading.
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Thank you Tnkerr! 🙂 I like exploring that side of things, too.
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Beautifully painted snipped of life.
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Thanks! 🙂 It lasted a second and then it was gone…
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So everyday and mundane and unnoticed as to be beautiful.
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Thanks. I’m glad the piece manages to convey that impression. That’s exactly how it felt.
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Love the artistic tension between duty and discards — going to work set to the rhythm of something ignored.
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Beautifully put. Thanks as always for your precious comments on my writing 🙂
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An interesting description. So much beauty lies in the everyday, if we’d just take notice.
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Couldn’t agree more. Thanks for stopping by and commenting 🙂
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skilful observation .. like it!
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Thanks 🙂
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welcome 🙂
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